Writer’s Notebook: Loglines

I hate writing loglines. I know they are supposed to be great pitching aids that sum up the story and get the gatekeepers excited to read the script. Yeah, yeah, yeah.

Sure, I received an A in the class. I can’t say I have confidence in my logline abilities. What I think is a good one someone else doesn’t. I find them frustrating. So I thought I would share some of the loglines I have written for my assignments. Please, if you have suggestions let me know. I am new to this and I am willing to learn as much as possible.

On with the loglines from class.

A Man, a Week, and Two Dogs
Who is the MAIN CHARACTER? Bitter but determined animal hater
What is the INCITING INCIDENT? Falls for a veterinarian
Who is the ANTAGONIST? Her ex-fiancé
What is the main character’s GOAL? To convince girl he is the one
HOW will the main character accomplish the GOAL? Babysit her two puppies

When a bitter but determined animal hater agrees to babysit a veterinarian’s two puppies for a week in order to win her heart he must upstage the handsome ex-fiancé who wants her back.
 
Who is the MAIN CHARACTER? Shy, courageous songwriter
What is the INCITING INCIDENT? Meets a girl at domestic abuse help group
Who is the ANTAGONIST? Ex-boyfriend’s lawyer
What is the main character’s GOAL? Expose her ex-boyfriend abusive ways
HOW will the main character accomplish the GOAL? Going on newscasts and making online videos

When a shy but courageous songwriter wants to expose her popular news anchor ex-boyfriend’s abusive ways she has to seduce his sleazy, married lawyer to keep him from suing.

Dance For Jesus
Who is the MAIN CHARACTER?  Funny but aggressive nightclub owner
What is the INCITING INCIDENT? Nightclub owner buys property in small town
Who is the ANTAGONIST? Angry mob of conservative religious radicals
What is the main character’s GOAL? Open nightclub in small town
HOW will the main character accomplish the GOAL? Throw “Jesus Dance” party as his other club.

When a funny but aggressive nightclub owner wants to open a hip-hop bar he must outsmart the angry mob of conservative religious radicals who want to keep their town free of debauchery.

Crush with Blush
Who is the MAIN CHARACTER? Creative but sour makeup artist
What is the INCITING INCIDENT? Products go missing
Who is the ANTAGONIST? Grumpy security guard
What is the main character’s GOAL? Figure out who is the thief
HOW will the main character accomplish the GOAL? Recruit other contestants
 
When products go missing during a Battle of the Beauty competition a creative but sour makeup artist must tap into her inner Sherlock to charm the grumpy security guard and expose the culprit before her event begins.

Gymactrics
Who is the MAIN CHARACTER? Brilliant but overweight actress
What is the INCITING INCIDENT? Loses a sponsorship
Who is the ANTAGONIST? New stuck up starlet
What is the main character’s GOAL? Lose weight and get more roles
HOW will the main character accomplish the GOAL? Hire a trainer
 
When a brilliant but overweight actress loses several lead roles because of her appearance she must team up with a personal trainer to lose twenty pounds to beat out the new starlet in town.

Teacher and Student
Who is the MAIN CHARACTER? Smart but spoiled coed
What is the INCITING INCIDENT? Uncle is demoted
Who is the ANTAGONIST? Arrogant boss
What is the main character’s GOAL? Help her uncle pass an assessment test
HOW will the main character accomplish the GOAL? Tutor him
 
When her uncle gets a new boss a smart but spoiled coed must tutor him to overcome the arrogant boss who wants to replace him with the uncle’s high school rival. 
 
Ring Ring
Who is the MAIN CHARACTER?  Romantic and neurotic musician
What is the INCITING INCIDENT? Finds a love letter from boyfriend
Who is the ANTAGONIST? His nosey secretary
What is the main character’s GOAL? Propose to boyfriend
HOW will the main character accomplish the GOAL? Sending him on vacation

When a romantic and neurotic musician decides to propose to her boyfriend she must first overcome his nosey secretary who keeps popping up to ruin her plans. 

Bake For Your Life
Who is the MAIN CHARACTER? Feeble and kind volunteer
What is the INCITING INCIDENT? Her friend’s mother gets sick
Who is the ANTAGONIST? Rich, greedy, and jealous neighbor
What is the main character’s GOAL? Win a baking contest
HOW will the main character accomplish the GOAL? Learning all her friend’s recipes

When the economy tanks a feeble and kind volunteer must win a baking contest to keep her rich, greedy, and jealous neighbor from purchasing her best friend’s bakery to put her out of business.
 
Built With Heels
Who is the MAIN CHARACTER? Naïve and fearless architect
What is the INCITING INCIDENT? Loses her wrongful termination suit
Who is the ANTAGONIST? Sexist millionaire
What is the main character’s GOAL? Start her own company
HOW will the main character accomplish the GOAL? Petition female architects

When a naive and fearless architect loses a wrongful termination suit she must win a bid against a sexist millionaire in order to establish her own company.
 
Who is the MAIN CHARACTER? Poor and talented designer
What is the INCITING INCIDENT? Multiple students receive failing grades
Who is the ANTAGONIST? Evil science teacher
What is the main character’s GOAL? Get a scholarship
HOW will the main character accomplish the GOAL? Play pranks on the teacher
When poor and talented designer is desperate to get a scholarship she must outwit the evil science teacher determined to fail her and the rest of her classmates.  

Do you like to write loglines? If so, please share.

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